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Universal Healthcare - Final

The United States is in desperate need of universal healthcare. It is the only industrialized nation without universal healthcare, a system in which government funding (in most cases from taxes) pays and provides healthcare for all eligible residents in the country. A free and available system for everyone is something that most residents of the US dream of. There is no bias on who can receive healthcare nor dropping of coverage that America's current system has. It eliminates this idea of medicine as a business, only costing citizens a slight increase in taxes. Universal healthcare is the best way to go for the United States, who are in desperate need of change.



For universal healthcare to improve upon the corrupt system the United States has, the problems the old system has must be acknowledged and addressed first. The major problem with healthcare now in the United States is the huge costs. According to the Mercer National Survey of Employer-Sponsored Health Plans, over the past ten years the rate at which costs have been increasing have been as high as 14.7%. Thus, the average American that does have healthcare is estimated to spend close to $4000 a year and close to $225,000 a lifetime. It is no surprise then that 43.6 million Americans under age 65 lack that kind of money and as a result are uninsured.

Healthcare policies are the second yet perhaps equally important problem of healthcare. For the longest time this country has thrived on the use of HMOs, Healthcare maintenance organizations, or more commonly known as health insurance companies. While the idea of a company paying for all your medical costs sounds good, this is actually a fantasy, not a reality. These companies will do anything but cover you. When it comes down to it companies are no more than businesses and thus these HMOs turn healthcare into a business. For HMOs to make money they have to initially promise coverage until the time comes for the need of those benefits. Then every loophole is exploited or they try to minimize their losses so they can still be making a profit. Such is seen in the case of Aetna Health Inc. v. Davila. Aetna Health is an HMO that was providing coverage to Juan Davila. At the time Davila was suffering from a number of conditions that would have been easily treated with a pill named Viouxx. However HMOs don't concern themselves with proper healthcare, only money. Aetna gave him two cheaper pill substitutes that resulted in severe internal bleeding. The sad part is that this is the best case scenario with HMOs. Other times they drop coverage altogether and refuse to pay for operations and medication. If that doesn't happen people will end up like the average American, being overpriced by 118% more on medication even with coverage. What is evident is that healthcare has moved drastically from concerning for people's well being to maximizing profit.





The flaws are evident as is the need for reform. What many Americans are asking then is "How do we fix it?" The answer is universal healthcare. Universal healthcare would be regulated by the government. No longer would you hear the words, "Your insurance won't cover it." A government regulated healthcare system would give you benefits regardless. Best of all it would move away from this injustice of having it in a business structure. HMOs would be abolished. The only cost would be a slight increase in taxes. Over 50% of Americans surveyed in a CBS segment agreed that paying a bit extra on taxes was well worth it.



There are a few doubts on universal healthcare. The major question is the quality of this new system. In response the US has one of the longest average life expectancies of people over 65 in the world. The most plausible reason would be the fact that the elderly have Medicare, a universal healthcare system for people over 65. However, if that's not enough, there's always the countries that already have it in comparison to ours. Studies conducted show that Canada's universal healthcare performs well in response to 5 medical issues while America sits at 2. In addition 19 countries outperform the United States in preventing illnesses leaving the US in last place. The life expectancy is much higher in places with universal healthcare under 65, which only further proves that the system is inefficient even with its high costs. The only downside of universal healthcare is that there may be a slightly longer wait to see a doctor due to the fact that everyone has coverage. This is solely speculation, however, since each environment has a different outcome. Even if it were true, delayed healthcare is better than none which is exactly what most people are getting today.

Universal Healthcare is the best option for the United States. A government regulated system leaves no room for bias nor the greed of the business world. It is "free" and clearly more available for Americans than private healthcare. It is something everyone should opt for.

Karuna's Evaluation

Argumentative Research Essay Evaluation Points

1.
A. Drinking Age
B. It should stay at 21
C. Uses a great deal of statistics regarding how popular alcohol is.
D. State clearer why it is wrong and link it to why it should stay as is if not stricter.

2. Kids drink because of peer pressure and curiosity.

3. Doesn't seem to have.

4.
A. Doesn't really say specifically.
B. Strongest point is how she demonstrates why kids do it.
C. No weak points.
D. The argument order is fine.
E. Another strong point would be kids abuse alcohol when they're depressed.
F. Say that kids aren't as responsible as they think they are. Demonstrate how by discussing how many accidents happen as a result of this.

5. Thesis is good as is.

6. Choose two full sentences you think would benefit from revision. Copy and paste them, then rewrite them in a way you feel is clearer, less awkward, and more effective.

As said before, alcohol is the drug chosen by many adolescence, statistics show that from 8th grade to 12th grade, the adolescence picked alcohol over cigarettes and marijuana.

Adolescents is misspelled. Adolescence is a noun for the period. When using it as a kid it's spelled adolescent. Also it seems like a run-on sentence. Cut it off at adolescents and start a new sentence at statistics.

7.
The word adolescents seems overused in the essay. Vary it with teenagers or kids. In addition the paper seems more like a research paper than an argumentative. The facts are good but need to say more of why exactly is it bad. Show death rates because of drinking and hospitalization.

Universal Healthcare Draft

The United States is in desperate need of healthcare reform, more specifically universal healthcare. It is the only industrialized nation without universal healthcare, a system in which government funding (in most cases from taxes) pays and provides healthcare for all eligible residents in the country. A free and available system for everyone is something that most residents of the US dream of. There is no bias on who can receive healthcare nor dropping of coverage that America's current system has. It eliminates this idea of medicine as a business, leaving the only cost to citizens a slight increase in taxes. Universal healthcare is the best way to go for the United States, who are in desperate need of change.

For universal healthcare to improve upon the corrupt system the United States has, the problems the old system has must be acknowledged and addressed first. The major problem with healthcare now in the United States is the huge costs. According to the Mercer National Survey of Employer-Sponsored Health Plans, over the past ten years the rate at which costs have been increasing have been as high as 14.7%. Thus, the average American that does have healthcare is estimated to spend close to $4000 a year and close to $225,000 a lifetime. It is no surprise then that 43.6 million Americans under age 65 lack that kind of money and as a result are uninsured.

Healthcare policies are the second yet perhaps equally important problem of healthcare. For the longest time this country has thrived on the use of HMOs, Healthcare maintenance organizations, or more commonly known as health insurance companies. While the idea of a company paying for all your medical costs sounds good, this is actually a fantasy, not a reality. These companies will do anything but cover you. When it comes down to it companies are no more than businesses and thus these HMOs turn healthcare into a business. For HMOs to make money they have to initially promise coverage until the time comes for the need of those benefits. Then every loophole is exploited or they try to minimize their losses so they can still be making a profit. Such is seen in the case of Aetna Health Inc. v. Davila. Aetna Health is an HMO that was providing coverage to Juan Davila. At the time Davila was suffering from a number of conditions that would have been easily treated with a pill named Viouxx. However HMOs don't concern themselves with proper healthcare, only money. Aetna gave him two cheaper pill substitutes that resulted in severe internal bleeding. The sad part is that this is the best case scenario with HMOs. Other times they drop coverage altogether and refuse to pay for operations and medication. If that doesn't happen people will end up like the average American, being overpriced by 118% more on medication even with coverage. What is evident is that healthcare has moved drastically from concerning for people's well being to maximizing profit.

The flaws are evident as is the need for reform. What many Americans are asking then is "How do we fix it?" The answer is universal healthcare. Universal healthcare would be regulated by the government. No longer would you hear the words, "Your insurance won't cover it." A government regulated healthcare system would give you benefits regardless. Best of all it would move away from this injustice being done currently of having it in a business structure. HMOs would be abolished. The only cost would be a slight increase in taxes. Over 50% of Americans surveyed in a CBS segment agreed that paying a bit extra on taxes was well worth it.

There are a few doubts on universal healthcare. The major question is the quality of this new system. In response the US has one of the longest average life expectancies of people over 65 in the world. The most plausible reason would be the fact that the elderly have Medicare, a universal healthcare system for people over 65. However, if that's not enough, there's always the countries that already have it in comparison to ours. Studies conducted show that Canada's universal healthcare performs well in response to 5 medical issues while America sits at 2. In addition 19 countries outperform the United States in preventing illnesses leaving the US in last place. The life expectancy is much higher in places with universal healthcare under 65, which only further proves that the system is inefficient even with its high costs. The only thing that may be said is a downside is that there may be a slightly longer wait to see a doctor since everyone will have coverage if it were implemented. This solely speculation, however, since each environment has a different outcome. Even if it were true, delayed healthcare is better than none which is exactly what most people are getting today.

Universal Healthcare is the best option for the United States. A government regulated system leaves no room for bias nor the greed of the business world. It is "free" and clearly more available for Americans than private healthcare. It is something everyone should opt for.

Revised Healthcare Thesis

It is almost unbelievable that one of the largest superpowers in the world does not have universal healthcare. The United States is treading behind when it comes to the field of medicine. The large industrial nation is known for having one of the most expensive and underperformed medical system in the world. It is also the only industrialized nation without universal healthcare, a system in which government funding (in most cases from taxes) pays and provides healthcare for all eligible residents in the country. In a system like this there is no going wrong. A free and available system for everyone is something that all residents of the US dream of. Some are skeptical but the alternative private system is far from perfect. That system discriminates on who can get coverage and what to cover. Companies drop anyone or any operation that would cost them too much. Healthcare is a business more than anything else currently. As if that wasn't already bad enough, that system is private because of the overwhelming cost. In other words millions of people can't afford it and thus are uninsured. Universal healthcare eliminates this bias and the overwhelming medical costs. It is the best way to go for the United States, who are in desperate need of change.

It is almost unbelievable that one of the largest superpowers in the world does not have universal healthcare. The US is treading behind when it comes to the field of medicine, being ranked as having the most expensive and underperformed medical system in the world. It is the only industrialized nation without universal healthcare, a system in which government funding (in most cases from taxes) pays and provides healthcare for all the residents in the country that are eligible. In a system like this there is no going wrong. A free and available system for everyone is something that all residents of the US dream of. Some people are skeptical but the alternative private system is far from perfect. That system discriminates on who can get coverage and what to cover. As if that wasn't already bad enough, these private institutes are unaffordable to over half the country and as a result many U.S. citizens are uninsured. Universal healthcare provides a system free of this and much more.

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New literacy

"New Literacy" by Clive Thompson addresses the issue of online literacy and whether its good or bad. Thompson displays a sort of intrigue on the topic holding no bias towards it whatsoever as opposed to the hard text, book experts who think it is the end of literacy. He believes that instead of wrong it is different. With the online world advancing every day comes a new form of literacy. In addition, Thompson states that in reality students write more than ever. Whether it be instant messaging or updating Facebook, the new generation is creating and thinking more than anyone previously. New Literacy is a revolutionizing idea that is going to change the way everyone writes.

Thompson brings up many great points about online writing. Online writing isn't wrong. if anything it should be encouraged. So many times are the words boring and dull associated when English teachers assign essays to be written or to read a book. With online writing and reading it appeals to the interests of students. It becomes more social than work related. Besides making literacy less of a burden to the new generation it actually helps educate students more. Online literacy provides a new way of thought, a different form of prose. Students now know how to persuade people to pick a side on a controversial topic. Online compositions are helping them create a smooth flow of organized ideas which in an essay that's handwritten seems to be so much of a struggle. Thompson's last conclusion from analyzing online writing is perhaps the most important. By taking several writing samples of students who belong to this "new online world," a Stanford professor couldn't find a single example of illiteracy.

Literacy is just like anything else in life. As time moves on it experiences advances. That is all the online world is doing. Providing another step for literacy. Just as the printing press revolutionized how people expressed themselves the internet will start another revolution that will have similar if not a bigger impact on writing. As it stands only good results can be seen but only time will tell.